|Lesson 5 - Sentence Fluency
Story from lessons prior
This is a 7 part lesson using the 6 + 1 Traits of Writing
The objective for Lesson 5 (Sentence Fluency):
Students will be able to identify if their sentences flow together nicely and their sentences beginnings vary.
1. Have students look over the changes we have made to our story, places where we added in details to let our voices be heard, and places where we added in words to show knowledge of the topic.
2. Explain to the students that today we are going to look at something called “Sentence Fluency.”
3. Explain that “Sentence Fluency” is how well our sentences flow together. When we read our story, does it sound choppy or does it flow smoothly? Is our story easy to understand or is it difficult? Ask if every sentence starts off with the same word or whether any words are used incorrectly.
4. We want to make sure that our story reads easily for our readers.
5. Say aloud this passage, “The bear went to the den. Then the bear went out looking for berries. Then the bear went to find his friends.”
6. Ask the students, "What is wrong with this?" They should answer that all the sentences start off in the same way, and it sounds like we are making a list of what the bear is doing that day.
7. Ask the students, “How can we fix this?”
8. Suggest this passage, “First the bear went to his den. He then realized that he was hungry so he went out looking for yummy, juicy, and sweet berries. After the bear was full from his berries he decided he was bored, so he went looking for his friends.”
9. Explain to the students, not only did we make these sentences flow better, but we added detail with good word choices, and our voice.
10. Look back at the story we wrote. Say, “I am going to read this aloud and I want you to listen for places that do not sound right, areas that sound choppy, or words that are repeating themselves too much.”
11. Read the story and allow the students to raise their hands to point out sentences which do not sound right.
12. Ask the students to tell you what they are going to look for in their writing. They should answer that they are going to make sure that not all their sentences start off the same way (for example: The bear went to the den. Then the bear went out looking for berries. Then the bear went to find his friends.) They are also going to change those sentences to make them sound more interesting.
13. Have a student repeat what they are going to do back at their seats.
14. Send students back to their seats to work.
15. Leave enough time at the end to allow students to share their writing with the class, table, or a partner.
16. Put writer’s notebooks away for tomorrow.
Lesson 2 - Organization
Lesson 3 - Word Choice
Lesson 4 - Voice
Lesson 6 - Conventions
Lesson 7 - Presentation
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Georgian Forest Elementary School
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